In life we are faced with many difficult situations. We have the choice to fight for what we believe, in or simply keep our heads down as if it did not affect us. There are consequences for either action that is chosen. When trying to stand up for what we believe in, we could be pushed to the floor and forced to believe what the people around us think is right. If we choose to keep our heads down, the feeling that is felt is just the same as being pushed to floor since you are choosing to believe what you know is wrong. In Black Boy by Richard Wright, Richard has to face these obstacles on a daily basis. He grew up at a time where people of color were not allowed to speak their mind. If they did the consequences were either beatings that could leave them either badly hurt, or in some cases an inch from death.
Put yourself in a situation where you are riding your bike then suddenly your tire is punctured, a car pulls over offering you a ride. They offer you some water and you refuse, out of nowhere a glass bottle is smashed between your eyes and they say to you: “******, ain’t you learned no better sense’n that yet”, Ain’t you learned to say sir to a white man yet?” It is hard to picture a time where scenes like this or other hate crimes occurred daily. It is hard to understand that people of color, only about a hundred years ago were treated in this cruel manner. Richard was young, he was a victim of many hate crimes, yet he still got up every morning to a life where he was considered worthless. In present day America, racism is not illegal since there is no way to change how an individual thinks, however hate crimes are illegal.
People today say they have felt hunger, but have they truly felt it as Richard did for many years throughout his life? Richard’s life became complicated when his father decided to leave his family for another woman. Money was scarce for the Wright family, suddenly there was no food in the house Richard and his brother would have to go through the day with just a loaf of bread and a pot of tea between them. When Richard was placed in an orphanage he was feed a measly breakfast that was suppose to last him the day, at times he was to weak from hunger to accomplish the tasks set for him. When his school mates went to the store to buy food, he was asked why he would not buy food he would respond with, “I am not hungry or I ate a big meal earlier”. He decided to get a job so he could afford the necessities of food but something always went wrong either he was proud and quit or he was laid off. With the wages he managed to collect he would try to save them to move his family north where racism was not present.
Richard who needed a job desperately was hired at local hotel as a hallboy. He learned that his co workers would steal anything left out by their employers. They questioned him for not doing the same and soon after Richard began a life of crime. He would bootleg liquor to white prostitutes, doing this earned him a dollar here and there, but was not enough to keep him satisfied. He soon quit this job to work at a theater, he was approached by a man asking him to hold and resell movie tickets, and he accepted the deal and earned an easy fifty dollars a week. He continued this only for another week then quit. He decided he wanted to leave to Memphis but he needed a bit more money, he stole his neighbor’s gun and pawned it. He later broke into a college storehouse and took cans of preserves and sold them to restaurants. He left to Memphis soon after.
Richard Wright was a hard worker who only wanted to live a life were racism did not occur. He was faced with numerous difficult situations throughout his life and he conquered them. He was able to accomplish his dream of going north and becoming a writer. In many ways Richard is an inspiration, since he was able to persevere throughout difficult times. If he was able to accomplish him dreams with all the difficulties he was faced with, then why can’t we? Proofread my essay and tell me if it makes sense?Mostly, no. It's full of spelling errors and grammatical mistakes. I'd consult with someone and have them proofread it. If they don't find the mistakes, never ask them again.Proofread my essay and tell me if it makes sense?I'm in AP English this year, and your essay is good, but not great. You talk about how Richard struggles to become successfull, but you always focus on the negative things he did. This completely contradicts your thesis statement which is %26quot;If they did the consequences were either beatings that could leave them either badly hurt, or in some cases an inch from death.%26quot; According this, your essay should be entirely about Richard's beatings. But mostly, its about he would steal or swindle people out of their money.
Second of all, the topic sentences in all your paragraphs are completely different from each other and are not related at all. for example, in one you talk about racism, but in another you talk about how he steals stuff to survive. Doesn't this mean you are providing reasons for there to be racism. I mean, how could you say that racism is bad, when you tell the reader that Richard would steal stuff. Its a big contradiction.
3rd of all, never use I or you in an essay. You must talk in the third person. Say things like, Imagine ONE being in a situation, instead of imagine YOURSELF being in a situation
4th, you barely talk about him succeeding in the last paragraph where you say he became a writer. You might want to focus on that. Also, your last sentence doesnt make sense, because in you essay, you say that you accomplished his dreams by swindling others.
5th, your essay would make sense if you were going to talk about how Africans back then might have done illegal things to survive because of the little opportunities and the racism they had.
Lastly, you made a few spelling mistakes.
